Unforseen Consequences Created 18 years ago2005-12-09 23:02:14 UTC by Archie Archie

Created 18 years ago2005-12-09 23:02:14 UTC by Archie Archie

Posted 18 years ago2005-12-09 23:02:14 UTC Post #151416
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Ok, Ok... So the Matrix Source was a big failure, but i took into account EVERYTHING you guys said, and i came up with a fresh idea.
"Unforseen Consequences" Follows a middle-aged citizen through the hustle and bustle of every day life in a combine-ruled environment and how different it is from what we're used to. Tell me what you think.
Also, I can't let habboi take all the glory with Tom The Headcrab :P

The map was made by me. It's called 'Locked Up' and after some major improvements, i'll probably release it. It was originally planned as a team-made map by me and habboi, but then Habboi got tangled up in Gang-Life and is too busy.
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Stay tuned for issue 2 (no really, i mean it this time. I've already taken the shots. It's just a matter of editing)
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-09 23:08:59 UTC Post #151417
Well, the mapping is utterly horrible, but the dialogue (?) is rather amusing in itself. You could put some effort into making it look better though.
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-09 23:11:33 UTC Post #151419
yep, a bit square. otherwise it's fine

why is everyone making gm comics?
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-09 23:17:08 UTC Post #151420
the mapping is utterly horrible
yes, i know... but its not totally horrible.. i myself think that the lighting suits the theme and textures. but (you may not beleive me) i left it somewhat blocky on purpose, because as i stated above, the map was gonna be a team effort by me and Habboi. Habboi rules at HL2 arcitecture and aesthetics so he would do that part. I'm pretty good with entities and layout so i would do that part.
why is everyone making gm comics?
Just me 'n habboi at the moment i think.

edit :
oh, Dr. Mapper is also... well. sorry to spam comics.. i didn't realise. sorry.
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 01:20:47 UTC Post #151429
The dialog is quite funny, but I agree, the mapping is terrible. A few of the poses are a bit dodgy too.
m0p m0pIllogical.
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 01:26:09 UTC Post #151432
You are focusing too much on the visuals and not on the humor.
Good idea but its nothing I haven't seen in HLcomic.
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 03:17:13 UTC Post #151435
Exactly.
AJ AJGlorious Overlord
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 06:21:24 UTC Post #151445
Heh, the last bit made me chuckle slightly. The recollection tint is good.
Seventh-Monkey Seventh-MonkeyPretty nifty
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 08:40:10 UTC Post #151456
Not bad..
You should make the bubbles nicer and choose another, more comics-like font..
The mapping isn't very impressive too..
But the dialogs are quite nice.. :)
Daubster DaubsterVault Dweller
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 08:41:38 UTC Post #151457
I love making comics and maps.

Nice!

Posing: 1.5/3 - Butts sticking out and badly posed. Keep Trying!
Editing: 2/3 - Not that bad, but nothing special
Story/Humor: 2.5/3 - I laughed. abit.
Bonus: 0/1 - Nope, sos.

Overall: 6/10 - A little better than Habboi's Comic, but, I shall come back in a hour with a Xbox 360 Comic.

yay
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 09:43:35 UTC Post #151473
ISSUE 2
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Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 10:01:35 UTC Post #151474
Huh? Where did the fire come from?
ChickenFist ChickenFist<Witty Title>
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 10:05:43 UTC Post #151475
the guy is right beside explosive barrels... and is magically covered with oil... so when he lights his stun stick whoosh

btw, i hid G-man somewhere in Issue 2. can anybody find him?
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 10:46:22 UTC Post #151483
On the screen :)
I didn't notice this comic for a while :o

Pretty good the first one, your bubbles are nicely done, so much better than mine but I feel the dialogue is a tad bit silly, maybe thats what gives it its edge, who knows...

Also um type cl_drawhud 0 and impulse 200 to get rid of Garry's mod in the top right corner.

The posing is not bad, it is hard to get a good pose and I sometimes cover up bad poses with writing.

The Twack noises are well done but I just don't like the square boxes with the writing, keep to the round ones...By the way I used them cause I couldn't find a zig zag one :(

Yeah work on your mapping, it is not hard to place a few props (in hammer not gmod...) and add some walls with a few clipped angles to add some interest, put holes in some bricks and have a few square bricks lying on the floor as if they fell out...Look at HL2 you know :)
I base my ides off HL2, Valve stunned me with this pic...I plan to re-create that:

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Anyway just look at your square room and think, hmm what can I do to make it look better, i'll add a higher platform in the middle with some neat looking stairs, add a few relevant props and choose your textures wisely...

By the way I can help you out with mapping, I told them i'm taking a Christmas break and they don't mind me taking my time, maps are not as important as the models for the mod.
Habboi HabboiSticky White Love Glue
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 11:04:59 UTC Post #151486
this is cool... i like the originality. I thought of doing this with HL1 and model viewer, but never really went through with it.

kudos on effort tho.
Rimrook RimrookSince 2003
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 13:54:14 UTC Post #151503
so, my magical pixie army, the time has come to start editing issue 3.. coming soon
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 19:14:23 UTC Post #151564
Well,I think its awesome but nexttime try and make it longer, like the adventures of tom the headcrab and no offence, but i dont really like that map!
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-10 19:30:37 UTC Post #151570
hmmm...no offence or what...but, meh. :
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-11 06:15:37 UTC Post #151610
Their speech is pretty funny, but the maps are a bit lame.
Seventh-Monkey Seventh-MonkeyPretty nifty
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-11 06:34:27 UTC Post #151620
Heh.. The 2nd one was much better..
Obivious HLCOMIC style, Hunter.. :D
Anywho - nice work.
Daubster DaubsterVault Dweller
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-11 08:43:40 UTC Post #151651
actually, a few jokes in the second one were David Firth rips.
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-14 19:37:46 UTC Post #152314
ISSUE 3 The map is once again by me... mope about it all you want :P
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stay tuned for ussue 4
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-14 22:16:17 UTC Post #152335
drunken Gman is funny. like teh : D
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 02:48:24 UTC Post #152357
you can still see the gmod text in the corner, but nice anyway! :D
Strider StriderTuned to a dead channel.
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 05:11:09 UTC Post #152372
yay, thanks for that garg. i'm glad you liked him because about half way through i was starting to wonder if it was worth putting him there. RAGDOLLS ON STOOLS ARE FREAKING DIFFICULT! rofl.
u position their head, bam, their legs go flying, position their legs, it looks weird, re-posiition the head, falls off stool... argh. eventually i turned no colide on and just made him hover a little bit 'in' the stool. you cant see it from the distance anyways.
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 13:15:05 UTC Post #152442
Loved the drunken Gman.. :D
Much better than your previous work
The font in the bubbles is a bit.. BIG :aghast:
It really needs to be at least 2x smaller..
Daubster DaubsterVault Dweller
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 13:18:23 UTC Post #152443
It's ok. Moderatly funny, at best.
The fonts are way, way way too large. Nice posing on the chairs, allthough the main character looks pretty odd in scene 7.
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 13:45:11 UTC Post #152448
lol, I love it! Great! :D
An other sick comic! &gt;:D
Madcow MadcowSpy zappin my udder
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 16:38:35 UTC Post #152477
OMGSPLOSION ISSUE 4!!!!

same map as last time.... em. yep.
i think i'll do 2 per week.
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Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 16:45:30 UTC Post #152479
The beware of dog sign is a HLCOMIC ripoff.. Not bad, tho.. :)
Daubster DaubsterVault Dweller
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 16:46:27 UTC Post #152480
hmm? when is it used in hlcomic?
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 16:48:50 UTC Post #152481
One of the earlyer chapters.. When frohman visited the red barn.
Daubster DaubsterVault Dweller
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 16:50:26 UTC Post #152482
Lol!
Nice idea,, speach bubble thief
Madcow MadcowSpy zappin my udder
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 17:00:58 UTC Post #152483
I liked this one a lot, just as I liked the other ones.. It just seems to jump around a lot. it goes from theif to combine, and the "fight" is overwith almost instantly. good work, but maybe have a little more patience when it comes to putting in a funny joke, take more time to develope the story. all in all, 4.5/5 I liked it.
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 17:05:08 UTC Post #152485
Just cause they used that idea doesn't mean it's copyrighted ;(
Not bad...clap not bad...
Habboi HabboiSticky White Love Glue
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 17:07:17 UTC Post #152486
Lol, I love The hunters sick "impulse humor" though, it's kinda like mine, ^^
Madcow MadcowSpy zappin my udder
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-15 17:09:24 UTC Post #152487
hmm, you're probably right daubster..

i got the idea in my head, must have got it from hlcomic, but i honestly didn't remember it was in hlcomic.. ach well. its a small joke :P

issue 5 on monday.
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-16 19:27:32 UTC Post #152705
hehe That was the best one so far!

Yeah the fight was over quick but this one is the best made one of yours so far.
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-16 21:02:24 UTC Post #152708
^_^ thanks.

for the next three 'episodes' i have teamed up with a friend of mine called Paul. He's got a fantastic story idea which will be spready out over three episodes.

its gonna be good. i promise!
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 06:29:43 UTC Post #152749
ZOMG ISSUE 5!!!
right, seeing as this is a 3-part story,
I decided to release the first one early instead of my usual 2 per week.
This is because i would like to have time to do a Christmas episode as well.

so, without further ado-
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Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 06:54:04 UTC Post #152760
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 07:09:03 UTC Post #152767
Pretty good James :)
  • Jack
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 07:17:23 UTC Post #152768
The Gman is funny. :)
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 07:18:51 UTC Post #152769
:) can someone comment on the map please? it's pretty much my first C17 theme
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 07:32:55 UTC Post #152771
I like the whole story/dialogue, but it could do a bit bigger so that i can make-out stuff. Try 800px for the width of the comic.

The c17 map? Didnt really like it, but it's better then i would do in source. Though the bar is good. Oh, try to give the swat's a more swat like look, they look rather, lousy right now :) .
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 08:04:40 UTC Post #152776
Gman pwns :D

I have a comment, not about the map though.
In some "frames" or, what ever,, the characters needs to be more in to the center of the picture, else you show of to much empty space.
Like in page 5, picture 1.
Try zome in a bit and make the guy who's reading more like the center of the picture. :)
Madcow MadcowSpy zappin my udder
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 08:06:21 UTC Post #152777
well, i try to leave room for speech bubbles, but yeah, i suppose it is a bit excessive
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 08:22:29 UTC Post #152778
Yeah, of cource you can't predict how much space a speach bubble will take.
I didn't think about that
Madcow MadcowSpy zappin my udder
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 08:34:35 UTC Post #152780
oh also,
i thought i'd let you know -
In the next issue, you finally find out what my character is called.
Many comics on this site seem to have forgotten to give their characters names.. i know i'm guilty.

So, make sure you tune in next issue!
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2005-12-17 08:36:47 UTC Post #152783
yays! The George bush joke madeh meeh laugheh!
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