This is a good work to me, but you will have to modify the formatting once you'll find a publisher for the paper version
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Some points I don't like :
_we don't know the name of the guys,
_we didn't see Gordon, I mean come on guys,
we didn't see Gordon, not even a single f#ck#ng crate !!!" ![:zonked:](http://192.241.182.11/images/smilies/zonked.png)
the stuff black hole in the sky could need more frames, or "GGRrmmblbmmrrr" sound or something, maybe a change in the lighting I don't know, it looks too flat actually to me ...