Ansith's Gmod comic. Part 1 Created 18 years ago2006-06-18 05:31:18 UTC by Ansith Ansith

Created 18 years ago2006-06-18 05:31:18 UTC by Ansith Ansith

Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 05:31:18 UTC Post #185588
Well after doing that small comic on Geremy tibbles it is time to do my own and here it is (Please don't flame me because of the name I couldn't think of one):
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Please comment and rate. thanks
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 05:45:02 UTC Post #185589
uhh, the first 2, 3rd, 4th, and last 4 panels are completely unrelated...try to make sure that everyone knows what is going on, because there seems to be no main story....
Penguinboy PenguinboyHaha, I died again!
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 05:49:33 UTC Post #185592
Ok here it is explained: Ansith (the prison guard) is talking to the metro cop about whatever is being said, then he finishes goes back to work, then hopes something will happen. Rebels get into the base but are trapped, then their bodys decompose a few weeks later and then they talk about combine cooking class.

Yeah, and I do agree I need to put some more frames in to explain more.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 05:56:55 UTC Post #185594
Their??

Not again!

It's there!

Their= something that they own
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 06:00:18 UTC Post #185597
ahh crap not again.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 06:29:51 UTC Post #185606
This comic.. sucks. Sorry to say but it isn't funny at all..
Their??
Not again!

It's there!

Their= something that they own
That coming from you....
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 06:30:28 UTC Post #185607
and some of the text goes outside the bubble - not good
Penguinboy PenguinboyHaha, I died again!
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 06:35:48 UTC Post #185608
This comic.. sucks. Sorry to say but it isn't funny at all..
Yeah I know its not funny, I've gone through around 10 rounds of taking shots to get this, and this was the best.

4th frame, seemed a bit empty so I just added that stupid crap joke.

I'll work on humor next time.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 06:45:34 UTC Post #185609
I personally thought it was quite good. I understood what was going on and the second to last frame made me chuckle ;D Though there are spelling errors and text goes outside the bubble.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 07:18:47 UTC Post #185617
"Were locked in"?

Concerned makes sense...
Seventh-Monkey Seventh-MonkeyPretty nifty
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 07:19:09 UTC Post #185618
sort out the speech bubble order, its not logical for reading
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 07:35:55 UTC Post #185620
It needs improvements but bloody hell it is actually pretty good...Plus I'm in love with the Combine theme so any comic with that slick blue texture makes me wanna <3...(Is that right? I never used the <3 >3 thing before)

The spelling really needs some work but may I suggest you copy and paste each bubble sentence into M Word before saving.
Habboi HabboiSticky White Love Glue
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 07:52:08 UTC Post #185622
EDIT: I put ties instead of tries, I can't edit now I have to goto bed

OK well heres one based on a conversation on IRC we had just a little while ago:
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Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 08:04:18 UTC Post #185624
What happened to the border? I think the 'tied' is cute in a sense that you tried but failed so in a way it could be on purpose.

It's ok I guess but not as inspiring as the first but also on the last panel there is some kind of dirt on the left bubble...And no it isn't my screen.
Habboi HabboiSticky White Love Glue
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 08:24:17 UTC Post #185625
appart from the poor plot and depressing lack of grammar in places, the first comic isn't too bad.. The posing is pretty good...

Still, not funny.
Archie ArchieGoodbye Moonmen
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 09:45:35 UTC Post #185637
also, stop setting comics in cs_office
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 10:35:11 UTC Post #185638
Here's how you make comedy.

Regular things happen.
Something very unexpected happens all of a sudden.
A reaction to that.

Add blood, gore and manly physics and you've got a winning comics.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 10:43:00 UTC Post #185639
and depressing lack of grammar in places
You guys should learn the diffrence between grammer and spelling.

Grammer: Tenses and all those stuff.
Spelling: Writing words correctly.

I hardly found any grammertical errors in his comics. But there are a few sentences I can hardly understand but I'm not too sure it has to do anything with his grammer.
Like this one:
I'm going to fix this comics up so bad.
There is something wrong with this sentence and I can't put my finger on it. :tired:

Ansith you should learn where you should place commas:
Just start a new one , idiot!
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 11:00:03 UTC Post #185641
Were instead of we're, we are = grammar error.

And yes, there's a severe lack of commas in near all sentences.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-18 11:46:15 UTC Post #185649
zl, non sequiters are such lazy comedy

also, i hate family guy
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-19 02:08:43 UTC Post #185770
Ok I'm going to re-make the first one.

TheGrimReafer made this map, its a full working fortress, Me and him have had a few games messing around in Gmod with it. and the thing with the rebels is what he did to me the first time he showed me the map, I'll add a few more frames to show how everything looks and to link it toghether a bit more, and also fix up the speech bubbles and spelling.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-19 07:50:42 UTC Post #185802
Not another comic maker.

Any way it is good to see the diversity of this website. Ansith well done
the comics are quite amusing. keep up the good work
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-19 09:36:50 UTC Post #185835
You guys should learn the diffrence between grammer and spelling.
grammertical
Look who's talking..
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-20 06:04:22 UTC Post #185999
http://img19.imageshack.us/img19/1986/comicextrafull12ix.jpg

It should make sense to the people who didn't get it before.

Forget you ZL
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-20 06:18:24 UTC Post #186001
I liked it :)
Quite clean design, easier to understand.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-20 06:21:16 UTC Post #186002
Lol!
Pwnfull Ansith, <3
Madcow MadcowSpy zappin my udder
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-20 08:42:27 UTC Post #186014
Ansith, it's much better this time. You just needed more frames.

Doc.chadder: You shouldn't blur everything, like you did in your first comics. I didn't understand anything.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-20 08:50:44 UTC Post #186016
I was too lazy to check the other comics, especially hunter's one... too much text. :P
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-22 02:05:26 UTC Post #186307
Thanks everyone, I'm making a part 2 now.
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-22 04:59:48 UTC Post #186319
Haha.. The 1st one was pretty good.. :D
Nice work!
Daubster DaubsterVault Dweller
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-22 10:21:02 UTC Post #186345
I actually like the first one quite a lot. Especially the frame with the corpses. The funny thing is, why are two of them naked ? :D
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-22 10:36:16 UTC Post #186348
Heh because that's how Valve make games...They make a list: 1. Model naked bodies for fun later...2. Code Source 3. Email Gabe for pies.
Habboi HabboiSticky White Love Glue
Posted 18 years ago2006-06-22 10:49:54 UTC Post #186350
rofl, good comic Ansith. :D
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