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I didn't notice this comic for a while
Pretty good the first one, your bubbles are nicely done, so much better than mine but I feel the dialogue is a tad bit silly, maybe thats what gives it its edge, who knows...
Also um type cl_drawhud 0 and impulse 200 to get rid of Garry's mod in the top right corner.
The posing is not bad, it is hard to get a good pose and I sometimes cover up bad poses with writing.
The Twack noises are well done but I just don't like the square boxes with the writing, keep to the round ones...By the way I used them cause I couldn't find a zig zag one
Yeah work on your mapping, it is not hard to place a few props (in hammer not gmod...) and add some walls with a few clipped angles to add some interest, put holes in some bricks and have a few square bricks lying on the floor as if they fell out...Look at HL2 you know
I base my ides off HL2, Valve stunned me with this pic...I plan to re-create that:
Anyway just look at your square room and think, hmm what can I do to make it look better, i'll add a higher platform in the middle with some neat looking stairs, add a few relevant props and choose your textures wisely...
By the way I can help you out with mapping, I told them i'm taking a Christmas break and they don't mind me taking my time, maps are not as important as the models for the mod.